Seeking Help For My Draft

With my first draft in the books, I quickly looked for help, as I know my papers to be a bit wordy and ramble on. Rather than just small issues with my writing, these are bad habits that I have been long trying to break, but unfortunately am more often than not plagued by tunnel-vision. Thus, I had my good friend Kazi take a look. His analysis was not quite as detailed as I would have liked, but he did help cut down on unnecessary words. He also gave me some good ideas on how to explain the compliment between the stories and the pictures. Though this improved my essay, I will definitely still be looking for more peer review.